Weekend Open Critique Day #H18

Time for another OCD. Let's see what you have for us today. I hope that everyone is having a wonderful weekend.

 

My new rules for posts, contests, and challenges that I am hosting: Original characters only, no copyrighted characters, no characters based on copyrighted characters, no characters based on RPG’s or other games. The characters must be your own design and not based on any character that might be copyrighted in any way. I have the right to delete any post that I believe crosses this line with “no” warnings.