Open Critique Day #H10

HMers’ Assemble! Come forth and show us your art. Take down the evil doers by asking for help with any troubles you are having. Take giant leaps and bounds over the obstacles that are holding up your art work. With comments comes great critiques. (Sorry Stan Lee moment there) Bring it on, show us what you have and we will tell you what we think.

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23 Responses to Open Critique Day #H10

  1. @ JR, It almost looks like it was done on the black paper that you scratch the black off to see the colors under it. It looks cool but it does have a fussy look. As for it working, I would have to know what it was going to be working in before I could say yes or no.

  2. Dionne Jinn:
    Three hanged men. Some of you might have seen the guy in the middle before…

    http://www.heromachine.com/wp-content/legacy/forum-image-uploads/dionne-jinn/2013/01/CorsaroRossoReMix11-1.png

    Morbid would be one word for it. The background just does not have the right feel to go with the hanging post.

  3. Hammerknight: Morbid would be one word for it. The background just does not have the right feel to go with the hanging post.

    I know the background doesn’t work, really. It should be a town square (in 17th century town, if memory serves me) but I’m running low on ideas how to improve it.

  4. http://i1224.photobucket.com/albums/ee370/rhinoman151/Rhinoman-WingedCreature.png

    Had entered this in Jeff’s “Winged” contest.
    Just wanted some feedback.

  5. JR19759:
    I need an opinion on this. Does it work?

    http://www.heromachine.com/wp-content/legacy/forum-image-uploads/jr19759/2013/01/The-Light-2.png

    Maybe keep the outlines for the body items you highlighted and then took away. The way it is now, if I’m guessing right, you are losing the body shape for effect.

  6. Sean From Edwards

    This is a mockup of the cover I want for my book that I sent to the artist as reference. There will be some changes made, but who do people think overall?

    http://sphotos-a.xx.fbcdn.net/hphotos-prn1/542537_527350817285737_558371150_n.jpg

    I originally wanted the woman in front to still be in full flight suit and just start taking it off to reveal some skin, but couldn’t get that to work in HM3. Not that it matters as the artist will be redoing the characters.

  7. Sean From Edwards

    Forgot to mention the fighters are my own design, as is the Font, the background is NASA public use. Strange as it may sound I assembled all the elements in powerpoint.

  8. http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/Scarlet_zps04f74f92.png
    Scarlet is a member of the Anonymous Heroes, who except no praise. I feel that she’s a bit bland at the moment, but I’m not sure how to fix that.

  9. Kicktar:
    http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/Scarlet_zps04f74f92.png
    Scarlet is a member of the Anonymous Heroes, who except no praise. I feel that she’s a bit bland at the moment, but I’m not sure how to fix that.

    I think the costume isn’t very flattering anyway, it makes her look a bit fat around the hips. However there are some good ideas there, the stomach area in particular.
    With your permission, I’d like to have a go at redesigning her, see if I can liven up the costume a bit, if that’s ok with you.

  10. Sure, go ahead.

  11. I’ll send you the text via PM on the forum. Then you can make edits to your satisfaction.

  12. theres multiple pix but its sort of a theme. a club for paranormal beings called Morningstar. the last guy is the owner. anyone know what comic characters i am homaging?

    http://i1260.photobucket.com/albums/ii579/barbario1/bar_zps1436972b.png

    http://i1260.photobucket.com/albums/ii579/barbario1/bartender_zpsaf348b04.png

    http://i1260.photobucket.com/albums/ii579/barbario1/Morningstar_zps80a7d0b4.png

  13. Rhinoman:
    http://i1224.photobucket.com/albums/ee370/rhinoman151/Rhinoman-WingedCreature.png

    Had entered this in Jeff’s “Winged” contest.
    Just wanted some feedback.

    i also like modifying the companions. nice job

  14. Nick Hentschel

    Rhinoman:
    http://i1224.photobucket.com/albums/ee370/rhinoman151/Rhinoman-WingedCreature.png

    Had entered this in Jeff’s “Winged” contest.
    Just wanted some feedback.

    It’s a cute little composition: the little figure seems to have a distinct personality already. The background isn’t quite as vivid, so it doesn’t quite tell a full *story*, but the creature itself jumps right out at you.

  15. @Rhinoman: I like. I would want to see ‘patches’ of that pink either around the hooves and claws or spots of fur for balance?
    @Sean: In general I like–but I’ve no sense of what the war’s over. Maybe an inset showing the enemy or a war correspondent?
    @Dionne: If the left and center have had their hands cut free, you might want marks or scraps of rope left behind. The guy to the left needs the ‘arm edges’ either hidden or widened and ‘roughed’ to look more like bulging muscle. Maybe hide the background with a fog or use a freaking lot of the ‘crowd’ companion and have the hangman’s shadow [hangman off stage] hide all but the side of one building and some nature in the distance? Tough one.

  16. @TOOL, can’t fault it, something about straps. Awesome

    @Sean From Edwards. I get the powerpoint thing, I dick around on it making graphics at work where I can’t get photoshop. After a few years of tinkering, I almost like it better

    This just feels a bit flat, any ideas guys?:

    http://www.heromachine.com/wp-content/legacy/forum-image-uploads/iscarioto/2013/02/Iscarioto_WaxenWings.png

  17. I love the idea and the sun shining, maybe some more color would help? I wish I knew how to better do shading and shine like some people do to really make my stuff POP!

  18. Iscarioto:
    @TOOL, can’t fault it, something about straps. Awesome

    @Sean From Edwards. I get the powerpoint thing, I dick around on it making graphics at work where I can’t get photoshop. After a few years of tinkering, I almost like it better

    This just feels a bit flat, any ideas guys?:

    http://www.heromachine.com/wp-content/legacy/forum-image-uploads/iscarioto/2013/02/Iscarioto_WaxenWings.png

    Really cool…The only thing I would add are some light beams, like the ones in your background, and put them on his wings and his feet to give the look of the sunshine being blocked.(like when sunlight comes through clouds) Should be the same angle as the ones in your background.

  19. @Iscarioto: Two things–his chest and neck/shoulder area looks wrong and I want more mid-process with the wing destruction.
    As for the wings, I’d suggest putting more feathers still half-attached and globs of wax dripping from the feathers and separately. As for the anatomy, you’ll probably need some time with a mirror and lots of Insignia/Tech basic shapes. Good work so far and a great story to choose.