Friday Open Critique Day #H1

Here it is, the day you waited all week for, “Friday” open critique day. Show us what you got and we will be happy to tell you what to do with it.

40 Responses to Friday Open Critique Day #H1

  1. Show us what you got and we will be happy to tell you what to do with it.

    Mmmm…. might want to re-phrase that. ;)

  2. Ok, I’ll try to get the ball rolling here….. Here is a continuation of the last OCD….

    This guy: https://lh3.googleusercontent.com/-4RChWt3xMHM/UMIx0fJTf0I/AAAAAAAAFMU/1YvwXndSyCU/s1600/Golden%2520Lighning%25202.png

    And for comparison, here is the one I posted in the last OCD:
    https://lh3.googleusercontent.com/-2P2EHFp2QvA/UIOYvQ5K9iI/AAAAAAAAFJI/_pkSYnFTkiU/s800/Worf-Golden%2520Lighning.png

    Question: is it better now? Any issues with the character?

  3. The Atomic Punk: Mmmm…. might want to re-phrase that.

    Just a mood I woke up in. I was hoping to get a laugh out of it.

  4. @Worf, to me the new picture makes a bolder statement. You are more focused on the character then you are on the background, which slaps the character in the reader’s face. The first one would more or less be a picture you would find at the end of the story as you pull out, drawing away from the character leaving the reader wondering what is next for the character. Is it a sad ending, where the character is left there alone after a tragic battle? Is it look of a sad character that has lost his love? It could be called a “to be continued” look leaving the reader wondering what comes next. The first one is more of a “I’m here to kick some a$$” look that would be at the start of the book. Both are wonderful and could be used to tell about the story without using words to describe the feeling the character has.

  5. alphaalpharomeo:
    http://i961.photobucket.com/albums/ae99/dhabirunner/Justice%20Titans/Prometheus.png

    For me, the two colors you’re using for the character are too close to each other. It strains the eye makes it very flat.

  6. alphaalpharomeo

    Worf: Ok, I’ll try to get the ball rolling here….. Here is a continuation of the last OCD….This guy: https://lh3.googleusercontent.com/-4RChWt3xMHM/UMIx0fJTf0I/AAAAAAAAFMU/1YvwXndSyCU/s1600/Golden%2520Lighning%25202.pngAnd for comparison, here is the one I posted in the last OCD:https://lh3.googleusercontent.com/-2P2EHFp2QvA/UIOYvQ5K9iI/AAAAAAAAFJI/_pkSYnFTkiU/s800/Worf-Golden%2520Lighning.pngQuestion: is it better now? Any issues with the character?

    Very Cool

  7. Malfar:
    http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/330/7/c/no_more_twilight_by_malfar-d5m8efy.jpg

    A vampire who hunts all vampire impostors

    I applaud the sentiment. The faces could do with moving down slightly on the decapitated heads, as well as the eyes on the main character. And theres something that looks a bit weird about where the wall meets the floor, the perspective is off. I can see what you’re trying to do with it, but it’s slightly skewed. Hope this is helpful.

  8. this is Jabberwocky:

    http://fav.me/d419zht

    I need some advice about his pants

  9. JR19759: I applaud the sentiment. The faces could do with moving down slightly on the decapitated heads, as well as the eyes on the main character. And theres something that looks a bit weird about where the wall meets the floor, the perspective is off. I can see what you’re trying to do with it, but it’s slightly skewed. Hope this is helpful.

    Thanks! Well, connecting walls to the floor is my eternal problem.

  10. Diga:
    this is Jabberwocky:

    http://fav.me/d419zht

    I need some advice about his pants

    What are you wanting for the pants?

  11. Malfar: Thanks! Well, connecting walls to the floor is my eternal problem.

    What I would do, is to remove the item between the wall and the floor. Then I wall take a background rectangle and make it into a base board for the wall. That way you can cover up anything you don’t like but still give a nice edge.

  12. Ah, good, was hoping the OCDs would continue.

    So, continuing in the same world as my past few OCDs, which I finally came up with a name for, ‘The Collapse,’ here is Voldraya Fiica.
    http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/HM/VoldrayaFiica-1.png
    My main thing is wondering to keep her with just the katana, or give her her shotgun back.
    http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/HM/VoldrayaFiica2.png
    And if I keep the shotgun, does it look good?

    Other critiques are welcome, of course.

  13. Kicktar:

    For visually the character looks like an medieval elf warrior female. The clothes are showing to the character comes for that era. In this case i think the katana is more preferable, but if you change some cloth part for a modern cloth than i think we see how joining modern weapon for your concept of the character.

    I hope that helps you a little.

  14. Kicktar:
    Ah, good, was hoping the OCDs would continue.

    So, continuing in the same world as my past few OCDs, which I finally came up with a name for, ‘The Collapse,’ here is Voldraya Fiica.
    http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/HM/VoldrayaFiica-1.png
    My main thing is wondering to keep her with just the katana, or give her her shotgun back.
    http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/HM/VoldrayaFiica2.png
    And if I keep the shotgun, does it look good?

    Other critiques are welcome, of course.

    It would depend on the story line. And the gun really don’t fit with the clothing to me. She looks like she comes from more of a fantasy land then a modern time.

  15. Hammerknight: What are you wanting for the pants?

    i’m just not happy about how they came out, this is an old Design from when I was still learning to use HM, and I just can’t figure out how to make a desent design for the pants

  16. Kicktar:
    Ah, good, was hoping the OCDs would continue.

    So, continuing in the same world as my past few OCDs, which I finally came up with a name for, ‘The Collapse,’ here is Voldraya Fiica.
    http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/HM/VoldrayaFiica-1.png
    My main thing is wondering to keep her with just the katana, or give her her shotgun back.
    http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/HM/VoldrayaFiica2.png
    And if I keep the shotgun, does it look good?

    Other critiques are welcome, of course.

    I agree with the others that unless the gun fits the setting, loose it. On other points, I like the eyebrows. However, the legs/pants bother me. You have them bent in such a way that it almost makes her look as if she has two waists. Also the proportion of leg to torso… it looks as if she’s 60% legs….

  17. Okey dokey, this is one of my “fandom” pieces (like my star wars original characters; see if you can tell which continuity this guy’s from! ;p)
    http://i295.photobucket.com/albums/mm156/Tuldabar/Dryder.png
    Now, you may notice I left the atire all white. This is intentional, as I had been experimenting with colors without finding one that really “fit.” I would like to leave that for critiquers to decide.
    Any ideas at all relating to ANYTHING are appreciated. Thanks.

  18. Tuldabar:
    Okey dokey, this is one of my “fandom” pieces (like my star wars original characters; see if you can tell which continuity this guy’s from! ;p)
    http://i295.photobucket.com/albums/mm156/Tuldabar/Dryder.png
    Now, you may notice I left the atire all white. This is intentional, as I had been experimenting with colors without finding one that really “fit.” I would like to leave that for critiquers to decide.
    Any ideas at all relating to ANYTHING are appreciated. Thanks.

    For me, the white works with the dark character. Having said that, the black line color with the black color 1 AND the dark blue color 2 makes the character too dark. I can barely make out his face. Try making either color 1 or the line color a dark grey instead of straight black. That’s my $0.02

  19. BIG thank you to Kaldath and Hammerknight who give suggestions for this character in the forums- this is the Current version of her
    She is Miki Nine (Warrior).
    http://i1162.photobucket.com/albums/q539/kjell17/Hero%20Machine%20Creation/KericsMikiNine.jpg

  20. @Diga

    I like the pattern on the pants, I read your concept, and i think the cloths are perfect for an lunatic, but i think the colors are not perfect. the overall effect is a bit confusing. I think if you change the pants color more perfect for the character.

  21. @Keric
    My first advice save your pictures in png format, not that pixelized than a jpg saved pictures.
    So back to your pictures. Simple but very effective desing. I like the patern in the kimono. The pose looks natural, not broken. My only visually problem are the fans and the Katana. I think either only the katana or either the fans only be on the pictures.

  22. @Kellkin

    Nice work. I like the armour of the horse part, great work. Overally a good character desing.

  23. @Rozenstal.
    Cool very cool. The theme is epic. I like the background with the flying birds.
    Nice work Rozenstal.

  24. @Worf: big improvement, only suggestion is to ‘curve the point’ on the bolt insignia–he’s muscular enough he should look even more rounded by rounding his own insignia. Curve up slightly.
    @Diga: mask the pattern to the pants and put them above the legs. Then ‘disrupt’ the pattern by adding small Insignia-tech crescents color3 to 0, 1 and 2 to each pattern color. Make the ‘disruptions’ follow the knee bulges SLIGHTLY.
    @Kellkin: good design, good armor — maybe a browner horse-half? The yellow looks wrong to me. [interesting note--I've not seen a dappled centaur if memory serves.]
    @Tuldabar: rmmm–part of the problem with the character looking too dark is the lack of background. Add some cave and webs to be sure about your color choices. uh–if it’s gonna wear white, just go ahead and mask on a bullseye?

  25. Harlequin:
    @Keric
    My first advice save your pictures in png format, not that pixelized than a jpg saved pictures.
    So back to your pictures. Simple but very effective desing. I like the patern in the kimono. The pose looks natural, not broken. My only visually problem are the fans and the Katana. I think either only the katana or either the fans only be on the pictures.

    Thank you! I now see that I HAVE the ability to save in PNG, I have always used Jpg as a default. The pattern was the “hawiian” shirt in Men’s standard Masked to the pieces with the first colors Alpha brought to 0.
    The pose was a Bitch to work out!
    The fans and the Katana. I kind see what you mean!

  26. Kellkin:
    This is my Centaur

    Nice work with the armor. Might add some protection for his legs. Otherwise, the swipe of a halberd would bring him down.

  27. Harlequin:
    @Kellkin

    Nice work. I like thearmour of the horse part, great work. Overally a good character desing.

    Thanks!!…haven’t done a Centaur before…thought I’d give it a shot.

  28. The Atomic Punk: Nice work with the armor.Might add some protection for his legs.Otherwise, the swipe of a halberd would bring him down.

    Thanks! Yeah I was thinking that he needed leg armor also. I’ll see what I can do.

  29. Herr D:
    @Worf: big improvement, only suggestion is to ‘curve the point’ on the bolt insignia–he’s muscular enough he should look even more rounded by rounding his own insignia. Curve up slightly.
    @Diga: mask the pattern to the pants and put them above the legs. Then ‘disrupt’ the pattern by adding small Insignia-tech crescents color3 to 0, 1 and 2 to each pattern color. Make the ‘disruptions’ follow the knee bulges SLIGHTLY.
    @Kellkin: good design, good armor — maybe a browner horse-half? The yellow looks wrong to me. [interesting note--I've not seen a dappled centaur if memory serves.]
    @Tuldabar: rmmm–part of the problem with the character looking too dark is the lack of background. Add some cave and webs to be sure about your color choices. uh–if it’s gonna wear white, just go ahead and mask on a bullseye?

    Thanks! A darker color would look better. Didn’t put a pattern on him, so I wonder why he looks dappled.

  30. Is this thing still open for entries, I just made this while I was sitting here tonight. Let me know what you think, its a little lighter than the darker angle I usually put on my characters.

    http://i1224.photobucket.com/albums/ee363/cameron_stanley_84/My%20Characters/TOOL-AngelWarrior.png

  31. TOOL:
    Is this thing still open for entries, I just made this while I was sitting here tonight.Let me know what you think, its a little lighter than the darker angle I usually put on my characters.

    http://i1224.photobucket.com/albums/ee363/cameron_stanley_84/My%20Characters/TOOL-AngelWarrior.png

    That’s bad ass!! Really like the blue wings…makes them pop against the armor. And that sword is cool too! Great design.

  32. Damn. I missed this completely! Hadn’t noticed that the blog was actually running again. Oh, well… There is always the next time.