Open Critique Day #20

It's OCD time again! And Happy Easter, for those who celebrate that!

As for how this goes, you post a work of yours, finished or WIP (aka work in process, for those who are new to abbreviations), and then others give you critiques on your work.  I do not mind if you post the occasional non-HM picture or piece of writing. Just make sure that you only post pictures that are your own design and not any that copyrighted or based off of copyrighted characters. 

Also, if you post a work, it is highly recommended that you also give someone else a critique.

9 Responses to Open Critique Day #20

  1. cliff says:

    @ Ken Weaver
    It’s weird and twisted, and I would have never come up with it, but honestly I can’t see anything that needs tweaked. It is very well conceived and executed. IMOHO.

    So anyone have any suggestions on Thumper?

  2. Lime says:

    @cliff: I love the expression on his face, well done. I would say, though, from the slope of the torso, I would expect his right shoulder (if not more of his arm) and both legs to be behind the branch. Maybe position his right arm forward, sort of in a “draped over the arm of a chair” pose? Not sure how to fix the leg, though. It’s an ambitious pose!

  3. Herr D says:

    Ken: That is weird enough that it needs a backstory. Good highlighting. Not sure about the baby head–maybe it should be reacting to something?

    Cliff: A bit more shadow on the right side to make clear the twisted pose I think you’re depicting.

  4. Nug says:

    @cliff I would change the color of its butt flap too. It’s a little too “camo-afied”, I believe. Awesome piece though!

  5. Skoul says:

    @Cliff : The leg that is behind the branch looks a little odd to me as it is shaded in two different colours, which makes it look like an amalgamation of legs. My advice would be to have his back most leg shaded in all one colour to let it flow properly. Otherwise it is a great pic.

  6. dreadyacht says: are the blueprints for a mech I invented. Ken, your cyborg is creepy with a capital Y. Cliff, is the halfling urchin male or female? It has eyes from the female set, but it looks male.

  7. cliff says:

    First I want to thank everyone for their comments.

    Thanks about the expression
    Most people don’t get the pose for some reason.
    He is laying on the branch sort of straddeling it which is why his leg is on each side, his chest is turned a bit and both arms are on the side of the branch, the right is close to his body for additional balance since his left is off with this dagger.

    @Herr D
    Yes he is laying/straddling the branch, but his chest and arms are laying on the edge, I had darker shadows at one point but was afraid it was too black, but will see what else I can do to shade the right side.

    @Herr D
    Yeah I admit I worried about his camo briefs getting so lost that people thought he was naked.

    The leg that is behind and hanging under the branch is shaded in two different colours because the branch is shading the upper thigh, but the not the shin/calf ,

    Actually Thumper is a Sylvan Elf and he is male although he is somewhat androgenous.

    And very kewl blueprint. Very heavy weaponed, it looks great, very well done. I don’t see a thing to change.

    Once again, thanks everyone.

  8. Ken Weaver says:

    Cliff, what I really really like is the fact that you think outside of standard hero poses. Great effects on the leaves too.

    Herr: Thanks kindly. Backstory is an undying love of Hero Machine. That and too many crappy sci-fi recommendations from netflix.

    dreadyacht is the best username I have seen in a long time hahah.