Open Critique Day #5

Alright! It's time for another Open Critique Day!

As for how this goes, you post a work of yours, finished or WIP (aka work in process, for those who are new to abbreviations), and then others give you critiques on your work.  I do not mind if you post the occasional non-HM picture or piece of writing, but keep in mind that, though there are some, not all of us here are writers or do art outside of HeroMachine. All I ask is that you only post pictures that are your own design and not any that copyrighted or based off of copyrighted characters. As for pieces of writing, I’m not sure about whether fan fiction is allowed, but for right now, just in case, don’t post fan fiction either.

Also, again, if you post a work, it is highly recommended that you also give someone else a critique. Throughout the day, when I'm not busy with class, I'll also post critiques.

12 Responses to Open Critique Day #5

  1. Where do we post? Do we post a screen shot or the actual in-hero machine work?

  2. Where do we post? Do we post a screen shot or the actual in-hero machine work?

  3. either

    do it here

  4. https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B7a6czptfjSPaUVVN2NBTTNNZDA/view?usp=sharing

    HM3. This is a sketch for my current D&D 5E character who is a Paladin/Sorceress with gold dragon in her blood line, ergo the yellowish bronze skin tone.

  5. ProfessorK:
    https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B7a6czptfjSPaUVVN2NBTTNNZDA/view?usp=sharing

    HM3.This is a sketch for my current D&D 5E character who is a Paladin/Sorceress with gold dragon in her blood line, ergo the yellowish bronze skin tone.

    Looks pretty good, however the left arm looks really awkward, and the yellow in the gauntlet and grieves look out of place. Try angling the arm pieces slightly, and setting the sword at a downward angle too. I also assume that the yellow in the gauntlet is to resemble the Gold Dragon?

    Edit: Okay very strange. Posted the comment and it decided to throw my text into the quote..

  6. ProfessorK:
    https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B7a6czptfjSPaUVVN2NBTTNNZDA/view?usp=sharing

    HM3.This is a sketch for my current D&D 5E character who is a Paladin/Sorceress with gold dragon in her blood line, ergo the yellowish bronze skin tone.

    Great base character to get started. I would take out the yellow in her armor entirely. You would want to promote her power through her dragon blood skin color and not blend it in with her armor. Keep the skin warm and bright and contrast with “cold” colors for her armor. Cheers!

  7. J3loodT4lon:
    http://i300.photobucket.com/albums/nn12/xXx_HellFire69_xXx/HeroMachine%203%20The%20Talonverse/Krasus-Model-1.png
    Krasus – King of Saleria

    http://i300.photobucket.com/albums/nn12/xXx_HellFire69_xXx/HeroMachine%203%20The%20Talonverse/Reign-1.png
    Reign – The Demon Prince

    http://i300.photobucket.com/albums/nn12/xXx_HellFire69_xXx/HeroMachine%203%20The%20Talonverse/Unknown.png
    Unknown – Celestial Being

    Characters look great. Some crazy good item choices. Try playing with you colors choices some more. Get some contrast between the background items to your foreground choices. Try not to use the same shades of one color throughout the image. Usually each color on the pallet that you have to choose from has 5 shades from lightest to darkest. Don’t be afraid to experiment and exaggerate with them. Great job! Cheers!

  8. Thanks guys and yeah the gold in the armor was originally intended as a nod to the dragon heritage but I think you’re right!

  9. Okay played with the arms and simplified the color scheme to remove the gold trim.

    The arms were where they were because they were hiding body arms underneath, I swapped to an armless torso which gave me more freedom.

    Still tricky getting them to look right…

    https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B7a6czptfjSPXy1lTHhmcENaRkU/view?usp=sharing

  10. @Prof K: I . . . would’ve put a dragon on the shield, since dragon is in the bloodline , , , crests are about heritage.

    @BloodTalon: He needs to be running a gauntlet. Sometimes Companions can be ’tiled’ and then modified as a shortcut as a pile of bodies.

  11. Thanks, but the horse head actually has meaning.

    She’s nobility from Waterdeep and her family raises warhorses. Its pat of the family crest.