I’ve learned that when you try to do anything other than a basic A-pose there’s almost no reason to use anything in “chest” and any chest armor you want should be made piecemeal from the gloves/shoulders/neck categories. Also try masking out oversized parts (On this one I masked out part of the neck piece that was sticking out behind his shouldercloak) or using extra parts on top to cover up areas that don’t look good. The shoulder cloak and the belt pouch I added for no other reason, which you’ll discover if you look under them.
I also thought his facial expression looked way too passive for that aggressive dance pose 🙂 so I altered the eyes to make him a little more intense.
Attached is a side by side and my remake’s text file.