Open Critique Day #9

Good morning! It's Sunday, and that means Open Critique Day.

Share your artwork in the comments section below. I, and anyone else who cares to, will offer our opinions on everything that gets posted during the day.

Please note that the forum rules apply here. That means no nudity, no profanity, no copyrighted characters or characters from copyrighted settings.

20 Responses to Open Critique Day #9

  1. The portal does not appear clearly as such. You should try to highlight the border more than this, maybe with various circles, I don’t know.

    Someone one made a kick-ass portal tutorial… There:
    http://www.heromachine.com/2011/02/11/how-to-make-portals-in-hero-machine-3%E2%80%A6-by-mashlagoo/

  2. This made by my really best friend birthday.

    What you think. How looking.
    The title is latin. Check it out what it means.

    Dies Irae

    http://www.heromachine.com/wp-content/legacy/forum-image-uploads/tarkabarka/2013/02/Harlequin_Dies_Irae.png

  3. I like the design of the character, and the contrast between the modern and the older looking world seen through the portal. It’s a good idea, and an interesting concept.

    While the tutorial that Arioch linked to is indeed kick-ass, I would argue that the problem with the portal isn’t it’s outlines, but rather the perspective of the world that it portrays.

    Note how, in Mashlagoo’s tutorial, all horizontal lines of the two worlds match up, to give the impression that both worlds are of the same scale.

    Judging from the perspective that you have created Walker is atually standing closer to the Henge than to the city street, meaning that the standing stones aren’t much taller than him, and that they are absolutely dwarfed by the modern buildings.

    This combined with the lower hanging clouds give the impression that the world that can be seen through the portal is much much smaller than the one that Walker is currently in, which shatters the illusion somewhat.

    I hope that helped. If you’ve got any other questions, please don’t hesitate to ask.

  4. Harlekin:
    This made by my really best friend birthday.

    What you think. How looking.
    The title is latin. Check it out what it means.

    Dies Irae

    http://www.heromachine.com/wp-content/legacy/forum-image-uploads/tarkabarka/2013/02/Harlequin_Dies_Irae.png

    I’m racking my brain, but I can’t find anything to critique. It is simply an excellent picture by an excellent artist.

    Oh, and the name means “Anger’s day” or more poetically “Day of Wrath”.
    I took Latin in high school 😛

  5. Guy Diga:
    Walker:

    http://fav.me/d65wpdh

    If I were doing the portal I would use the two “hole” items in Background standard ( Page two, top row, the first two items ) instead of a of a circle ( well oval really ) then I’d use some Zypping to create a glow effect around the edges.

  6. http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/Secret_zps51851e66.png
    General critique is welcome, but I was wondering if there’s anyway to convey that he has a child’s body, other than making him smaller.

  7. Kicktar:
    http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/Secret_zps51851e66.png
    General critique is welcome, but I was wondering if there’s anyway to convey that he has a child’s body, other than making him smaller.

    Since the character’s body is so concealed, and since his clothing isn’t very childlike, you shouldn’t be afraid to exaggerate his juvenile attributes, if you want his young age to come across. Give him less broad shoulders, wider limbs, a larger belly stubbier feet, a shorter neck and a much larger head.
    Making him shorter isn’t entirely necessary, but it would help.

  8. @Kicktar: The best thing is usually objects or other characters for scale.
    @portal discussion: I’ve always noticed that ‘natural’ rifts were, well, rips /tears/cracks while artificial ones were perfect circles. My understanding of theoretical physics suggests it would be the OTHER way. Natural formation-circle, artificial-rip. What do you guys think?
    @ALL: I’m having trouble with something. What normally goes in a medicine cabinet besides medicines?

  9. @ALL: I’m having trouble with something. What normally goes in a medicine cabinet besides medicines?

    razor blades, q-tips, bandaids – had to check my own actually.

  10. Prof. Abercrombie Q. Anthrax

    djuby:
    @ALL: I’m having trouble with something. What normally goes in a medicine cabinet besides medicines?

    razor blades, q-tips, bandaids – had to check my own actually.

    Deodorant, toothpaste, hairbrush…

  11. Linea24:
    This is Rane:
    http://www.heromachine.com/wp-content/legacy/forum-image-uploads/linea24/2013/06/Rane.png

    That’s really cool! Love the use of pastel colours and the simple, yet interesting, design.

    Apart from one minor nitpick (the arms should be layered below the sleeves) I have nothing critical to say about this one.

  12. Herr D:
    @Kicktar: The best thing is usually objects or other characters for scale.

    Good idea! An oversized gun, or helmet, or pet, or piece of jewellry, or something would work great.

    Herr D:

    @portal discussion: I’ve always noticed that ‘natural’ rifts were, well, rips /tears/cracks while artificial ones were perfect circles. My understanding of theoretical physics suggests it would be the OTHER way. Natural formation-circle, artificial-rip. What do you guys think?

    That does make a lot of sense.

    Herr D:

    @ALL: I’m having trouble with something. What normally goes in a medicine cabinet besides medicines?

    Make up- or nail polish removal, lotion, toothpaste, nail scissors, tweezers.

  13. Linea24: Rane

    I like her. My only nitpick is that her elbows are over her sleeves. The seem “disjointed” – as it were. I suggest layer her forearms behind the sleeves.

    On a personal note… Chloe went from “keyboard-protector” to “knock-everything-off-the-desk-on-to-the-floorer.” Now my laptop crashes randomly and overheats… makes it very hard to use HeroMachine! Haven’t been able to surf for days, and only for a few minutes at a time.

    Meh, I’ve been wanting to buy a new computer anyway… Auf wiederschreiben!

  14. Kicktar:
    http://i891.photobucket.com/albums/ac111/Kicktar/Secret_zps51851e66.png
    General critique is welcome, but I was wondering if there’s anyway to convey that he has a child’s body, other than making him smaller.

    Probably something with body proportions, too. Child bodies aren’t like adult ones, most notably the head. Can’t tell you much more, though. You should be able to find info on this.

  15. And that concludes this week’s OCD. Thank you all for showing us your artwork and for your advice.

    See you next Sunday!

  16. Thanx for the sundries list. Got some stocking to do.

  17. By the way, I wasn’t able to reply immediately to you guys’ critiques on Rane, but I want to say a belated thank you for your critiques.