The Apex of Assassins Characters

[Snail-Male]

Interesting and fun read. The direction seems to go toward the lunacy of “Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy” with the “single purpose” genetic races but has potential for a full-blown space opera. A nit on my part is that if the Golden People don’t need to breathe for 20 years, I think that Memphis would go into battle fully charged. So the microbe slipping into his lungs is sort of a plot hole.

Definitely like Aesneros. Hard to imagine what life would be like travelling the universe on the head of a creature that wouldn’t give a thought to swallowing you whole.

[Herr D]

As a writer, I tend not to ditch anything that I can alter or build around. If Memphis is TRICKED into breathing the microbe or someone is genetically enhanced to deliver it . . . [insert 17 other derivative ideas here] then that’s fine. As for the breath holding for 20 years, you should probably research spiders–they can ‘stasis’ themselves for longer, not needing to breathe at all. Then all you need is a tappable power source to maintain the forcefield, and you’re done.

There have been many times in my life I’ve thought putting myself in stasis would be good. Build the compound interest, save on food money, wait until I’m no longer ahead of my time . . . but you know that feeling, right? Good luck with the story. Put it up in the Writer’s Room here if you like.

[Vampyrist]

She’s very cool and very well done!

[Vampyrist]

She’s just as good, if not better. The muscle effect you use is fantastic, and if I may ask for a magician’s secret, is it from Patterns?

[meniukas]

I like yours twisted imagination.

[Author]

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